V110：Task2
what is the reason for losing a variety of language and culture?

It is almost impossible to talk of the human civilization without mentioning the unique (significant/profound) roles played by various languages and cultures. However, partly because of the tendency of globalization, partly because of insufficient protection, languages and cultures are losing their diversity in many countries( there is a decrease in the diversity of languages and cultures in many countries.)

Among countless factors which result in this changing, there is a(the) most significant one: the globalization. As we know, compared to the past, nowadays, different languages and cultures have more chances to influence and assimilate each other along with the globalization. Consequently, prevailing languages and popular culture(s) gradually replace some minor dialects and traditional culture(s). For example, in China, it seems that McDonald's and KFC are more attractive than many Chinese snacks for teenagers. Thus, when people study foreign languages and adopt (the)popular culture, it will weaken other languages and cultures at the same time.

The second aspect relates to lack of protection on the languages and cultures which are on the verge of extinction. It is no doubt that governments are responsible to deal with the problem. Unfortunately, whenever the claim is raised, the governments of most nations argue that their limited budget should be invested on other more benefic fields, such as finance or industry. Obviously, almost people did not realize that it will be a disaster for us to see the world's diverse languages and cultures disappear one by one.

In conclusion, there are still several reasons, which lead to losing a variety of languages and cultures, but the vital ones have been represented as above. Facing（Faced with） the severed situation（?）, it is high time that feasible measures should be implemented. （作者：Sun Yu）

賴老師評解：
得分：6+
這篇作文比較抽象，學術性較強，一般學生很難準確把握。語言和文化均屬于人類社會的"大件"，其消亡應從大的方面去展開。比如說戰(zhàn)爭，有時整個民族都被消滅；還有，許多古老的文化是基于迷信的，接受過現(xiàn)代教育的新一代不再相信，以至這些文化無后繼。再有，有些原始部落連文字都沒有，一當對外開放，必定很容易接受現(xiàn)代文明，語言也隨之而來。最后，我想提一點，作者沒有把"同化"展開，想想看，一個大中國有56個民族，漢族占了98%的人口，其他的不被同化掉才怪。等等，這些都是非常SPECIFIC的觀點，也容易展開。

作者的語言功底很好，但其論述對題目支持乏力。例如，BODY1的EXAMPLE之后的感想為"削弱"（weaken），這與題目的"消亡"畢竟還是不同，屬于"有點偏"型。BODY2則為"喊口號"型，無實質性內(nèi)容，這也是許多過六級甚至八級的考生最后拿到成績后不解為何寫作得六分的主要原因。只要有好的IDEAS，或都能寫得跟BODY1的前半部一樣好，再加上與BODY內(nèi)容有聯(lián)系的CONCLUSION，此作者的寫作可獲七分（無須提高語言表達能力）。